Topping the success of Mesquite's family-oriented activities, the city has many excellent schools with honor programs and a vast collection of extra curricular activities such as Theatre, Athletics, or Band. It's no doubt that every student is involved in something of their unique tastes. Our schools are known for excellent test scores, wonderful bands and sports teams.
Other additional aspects of our city is all the caring people who live here, we all work as a team to make our city as inviting as possible. Our city is comforting to even the most foreign of residents!
Lastly, our city council is very responsible and take many of the appropriate actions to make our magnificent city as great as it can be through sweat, tears, and hard work
You found some great information about the city, and stir it together well; use more rhetorical devices to spice it up a bit.
ReplyDeleteI like how you gave a very positive message about mesquite, but I don't think all these things really happen but you did a great job of listing some of the fun activities:)
ReplyDeleteTry to express your tone more, and the rhetorical tools. But you described what our city is proud of very well!
ReplyDeleteYour passage efficiently expresses how The subject(Mesquite) is very open to people of DIFFERENT ORIGINS and different personalities, and i find that it was a good use of Pathos.
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